So I kept sketching and came up with this sketch. Kind of choppy, a bit darker...I feel good about the strength of line, but have hesitations on the perspective and arm placement.
But here it is. I think not working out the jacket lines is part of what created the issues with the arm. I did work from the top to bottom and I think that can be seen in the quality as your eye progresses down the page.
*shrug* But...thats why I do this. To get myself to be more productively critical.